Divisions and Precisions

I'm struggling with this one.

I'm struggling with this one. I have a first draft of this story finished, but it's wrong. The image in my mind and the words on the screen almost match up... but not quite. I have a feeling that it will require some serious restructuring to make them match. I don't think I've ever struggled this much on a rewrite. This could be the best thing I've ever written, but it's not, not yet. If I could dig the words and images out of my brain, it would really help.

The working title, for the curious, is "Spared to the Sea".