La Vie Boheme

Help!

I need someone who read an earlier draft of "One Song Before I Go" to take a look at the revision I'm working on. I've got a tentative title change and a slight shift in the ending going on, and I'm not sure if it's better or just different. If there's anybody who can give it a quick readthrough maybe this afternoon, let me know, I'll owe you big time. :)

(I forgot to mention, , I already owe you big, cause your editorial comments sent me in the direction I'm going on this. Thanks again!)